plz update soon! the ending is making me want to know what happens. does amelia get into a fight with her? hope to know more!

awesome, but can u hurry with the updates? i love the stories, but not used to waiting.

i dont mean to be rude, but i hope there will be an update soon. you haven't updated for a while. it is a very good suspence, but i hope for more!

Dun, dun, duuun! Suspense yes, I wonder what Amelia will do now.

He finally found out! Yes! But holy crap...Amelia ruins everything!

Oh my gosh! Continue please! - gets down on knees and begs -

i don't know how many reviews you have gotten, but i think this story is great. please, keep them coming!

this was an amazing chapter

Things to improve on:

#1 Don't write the song squished into the words like that. Most people just read over the lyrics and it was very hard for me to read anything

#2 The events that were happening seemed to be jumping from point a to point c without stopping at point b

#3 Don't get water affinity mixed with FREEZING affinity. Ice is a form of water, yes, but it's the solid form. Water is liquid, and I really don't see how somebody with water a. can work with ice

#4 Amelia has turned into a total Jerk-Stu. I'm sorry, but you can find her in every popular girl stereotype

a) She's pretty

b) She's more talented than the protagonist

c) She's clingy and possessive

d) She can't stand the protagonist

e) She has something the protagonist doesn't

The plot line's going towards the cliche side too. I can kinda guess Inuyasha is gonna see what a monster Amelia is, and then go to Stevie for comfort. She's gonna admit that she was in love with him for her entire life, and he's gonna admit his undying love for her. Then they'll kiss and live happpily ever after.

So, those are some of the improvement things. Great grammar and spelling as usual, and I'm hoping I was giving CC and not a flamer x(.

-Annie

Great Job! I'm HOOKED!

Great job. :)

Yay! Another update! Ok, so I have to say I am really starting to like how this story us turning out. The bitchy blonde, the oblivious boy (sort of boy), & the girl who just can't get over a guy she thinks she has no chance with! Great.

As always this was a great chapter all in all, btw I love He is We too. Using Blame it on the rain was a great analogy for Stevie's situation.

Hmm... I don't know about Amelia... She seems like a foil to Stevie, and seems like one of those cliche antagonists the author chuck away when they're done with them. If it was something like Amelia was a monster or something in disguise of a monster who wanted Inuyashsa for his power, that would be cool :D.

Also, try avoiding the overuse of "I". It's hard, I know, but a reader can get very frustrated if they were reading a story like "I was in class. I had a seat beside the blonde cheerleader. I ate the piece of pie and I liked it because it was a meat pie and I like meat pie."

But onto the good things. Your grammar was very neat, as usual. No spelling errors that I could find. Also the diary part was so sweet and heartbreaking. I kind of cried :'(. Poor Stevie!

I hope I wasn't too hard with the criticizing part. I tend to be either too nice or too harsh, so feel free to confront me if I was harsh :D

-Annie

I just have to say it's kinda sorta amazing that this story started from a dream. Anyway, great chapter, I really hope the bitchy Ameilia can get some sort if payback courtesy of Stevie.

Ps: watever happened to zoey, stark, & the twins? I miss them.

I understand the subconscious thing. Remember The Final Fight? Yeah, anyway awesome chapter. Man I hate her so much I'm sorry Stevie. I'd kick anyone's ass if they said that to me. Well this reviews short because I'm super tired, but I don't want to go to bed. Go figure huh?