Great, me wants more!

I have a feeling this story is going to be really good. Are you thinking of putting Matt/Abigail romance in this story?

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Ann should be Morgan Lily or Joey King. I'd say Morgan cuz she has been in more darker films than Joey...

Interesting so far! Continue :)

Interesting idea. However, I do have a few things that you could improve on.

In the second paragraph, you describe Ann making breakfast for Avery and Matt. While some descriptions are good, I think that part was a little over the top. We don't need to know everything a character does. Descriptions are hard; there's too much and then there's too little. Try taking out some descriptions and seeing how it flows.

"Morning mom!" They say in harmony. This should be corrected to "Morning, Mom!" they say in harmony. It's a mistake quite a lot of people make, and it's fairly easy to correct.

When Ann talks to Abigail; I can't help but think that it's just a rewrite of meeting Esther. The dialouge was almost the same.

Well, it does seem like an interesting idea to write about Abigail. Good luck with your story!