I'm not sure I'll be able to find the right words to express the full effect this story had on me.

There was this eerie mood, or feeling, that settled over me as I became immersed in the world you created here and I've finally come to understand that it's the realism and raw edge to what you write that I adore so much.

Naruto and Sasuke were beautifully written, easy to fall in love with and (I'll admit) cry with as the story unfolded. All the blows to Sasuke's pride are heartily welcomed, and the pain, oh the pain they both survive through. Mental, emotional, physical...it's all in there and it leaves the reader breathless and exhilarated and worried and dismayed and simply frightened for them both as a couple and as individuals. Even the ending is ideal!

In short, this story is one of the best I've read in a very long time. I've been a fan of your work for a while, but haven't written reviews only because I was using the internet on my brother's Wii. Typing a review this long one character at a time with a wii-mote - not on my to-do list. Haha.

Now that I have a laptop again...

Once again, a great story. You really a great job on the characters, writing them evolve and grow together. I loved how Sasuke seemed to go through all the steps, denial, anger, sadness, more denial, and acceptance. The last part, when he is feeling sorry for himself, and Kakashi's speech, is so good. Naruto gets off easy, maybe a bit too much, but I liked how you showed him as someone whohad trouble expressing his feelings. They're both quite selfish,and it's great how you write them hurting each other, and coming back together.

You also write perfect sex scenes. I don't know how you manage to write full chapters of smutt without it ever being repetitive, it's impressive.

Thanks for sharing.

these last 2 chapters almost read like they were written by a different person. the depth, dimension, drama that made me feel, etc...were almost all gone from these last 2 chapters.

they weren't horrible or anything- it's just that the first 13 were so strong- this last chapter read like 1/2 of it came across as crack-comedy...the whole society stuff was a bit beyond ridiculous when held up against everything that came b4 it.

and the bit with naruto telling hinata that he was sorry he could not return her feelings- i thought was honorable of him- but you had him think he should have not said anything. what he said needed to be said so that hinata would not live the rest of her life in a fantasy- it would help her get past naruto and open her heart to someone who loved her as she deserved to be loved. and she was not 'shamed'_ naruto waited till it was just the 2 of them in private.

the bit about underage drinking and 3 weeks of punishment_ these kids live in a world where at 13 they are sent on missions where they have to kill and can be killed_ they can kill but not drink? they can go to war but not drink?

when sasuke and naruto were put in the cell- you had sakura's love for sasuke grow from childish crush to:

(she found her feelings intensifying and growing at an alarming rate. It was as if the seeds of her childhood love had lain dormant all this time. His return was like a flood of rain and sunshine and the seeds were growing crazily, trying to dwarf her common sense.)

_but here you have her be able to squash it after seeing 1 kiss and eavesdropping on sweet nothings..it seemed a bit contradictory.

again- these aren't bad things and don't make you a bad writer_ but the last 2 chapters didn't have the same tone and quality and depth and layers .

thank you for the time and effort you put into sharing this story with us- very generous of you

another intense chapter. i was surprised when i got to the end- sasuke's dialog actually made me cry without even realizing it- it was very touching- well done.

i am surprised with those thoughts going through the boys heads- that they still walk into the village blind. i would have guessed they could use some super ninja skills to scope the village out w/o being noticed/caught/sensed/etc_ cause tsunade did not guarantee sasuke's safety- only a trial- and what do the boys do when the council decides execution_naruto can't allow it- but naruto doesn't want to leave the village- and he doesn't want sasuke to leave his side. if they decide jail and naruto won't leave his side- but the council and tsunade insist- is he going to go against them and then what?

i look forward to reading how you work it out.

though you've already proven sasuke can warm his hands, rocks, metal_ but you made a big deal out of how cold they were (probably for symbolism or some other writer artistic reason)- but sasuke could have heated the ground underneath themor a number of other things to warm them.

a very entertaining story. you're a talented story teller

i can't possibly give a remotely adequate review_ the chapter was very long and it had so MANY ups and downs, emotional roller coasters, subjects, feelings- it was a lot overwhelming.

the main theme i can pick out is that you constantly have naruto come together and pull apart again and again- conflict/resolution, repeat, repeat_ it was over flowing with the trauma-drama

hello DRAMA- wow_ heavy stuff this chap- lots of answers to questions previously asked in earlier reviews. this chapter really went through quite a range of emotions- you had me crying and sniffling at sasuke/itachi reunion-. though i don't understand why he wasn't destroyed when kabuto released the jutsu over all of the zombies like naruto told him to. i know you wrote that itachi broke out of kabuto's mental/slave control- but he was still shaped/formed from kabuto's jutsu and when kabuto released it itachi should have gone down with the rest- unless i missed something...i'm glad he didn't of course, cause you wrote some great stuff- i just didn't know if you explained how he was there.

you screwed/tricked sasuke again- having itachi agree to let sasuke travel with him until they found the jutsu to release itachi- when itachi and naruto both knew that naruto knew how to do it already and there would be no search.

i think it might have helped sasuke if instead of itachi just say the elders will meet justice or blah like that_ itachi should have written a statement of the events of that evening and what certain counselors said, etc-then the inoichi's (ino's family have mind reading/swapping?) could go into those counselors minds while questioning them and find the truth-and those counselors who were guilty would at least go to jail or be executed legally or something.

-or maybe sasuke could just kill 1 off every couple of years-using his sharingan to mind control them to take their own lives and write letters of their great guilt and grief and could not live with their sins any longer.

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you had naruto and sasuke send clones to steal paper and ink to write letters to send to konoha- if they could make clones why not just send the clones to konoha to send the message- but then you used them to bring back the supplies to pamper and sex up naruto- i liked how you had sasuke show naruto that those creature comforts that naruto only thought he could get in konoha; sasuke could provide for him anywhere- and it was a lot more romantic sasuke's way-that was really nicely done...and naruto's reaction at the end was priceless- it was nice to end on some fun/humor after such a heavy chapter.

really well done. great story telling. thanks so much for sharing with us.

Sasuke felt, as it was his pet, that Naruto should keep his hands off of him. Naruto was of the opinion that Moose was theirs, and should be shared.

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considering naruto wanted to eat it and sasuke had to sharingan it into tricking/sacrificing fellow rabbits to feed naruto in order to save it- i'd also agree that the rabbit is sasuke's...especially since it followed/tracked sasuke for days to get to him- even got bit by a fox-and naruto's part fox-so it really shouldn't like naruto.

i'm interested to see why you had itachi have to sneak up on them instead of announcing himself from across the field or flaring his chakra signature for them to recognize him.

i don't get why you wanted to ruin the sex between naruto and sasuke. haven't you already tortured sasuke enough this story- you couldn't let him find naruto's prostrate_ it was horrible for you to make naruto say sasuke didn't do it for him- it's like if it's something that sasuke wants or would make him happy you can't give it to him. and didn't sasuke know about blow jobs- i'm certain naruto would have LOVED having his dick sucked_ wouldn't the whore have taught him these things- but all you covered was the 1 thing naruto didn't like- other than the kissing_ and then you even took the kissing away from sasuke.

the dialogs were good as always. i don't agree with naruto forcing sasuke to konoha- especially w/o offering alternatives to murdering the council- like justice. i imagine now that you brought itachi into the story that will be one of the topics

(He hoped it didn't run out, not now when he needed it so badly.)

-i thought his sage mode could continually absorb chakra from the earth and nature- to keep him supplied with chakra- i didn't think he could run out any more.

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( struggled to pull open the door that seemed to have rotted shut,)

-you had 50 clones go look for shelter- when they found the 1 he wanted- why didn't he send/make more to/at that place and have them fix it up and clean, get water, food, etc-while he walked there with sasuke_ he could also have had a clone open the door for him.-

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(He was worried about such a wound being open to the air, but could see no way to bandage it)

-his chakra was healing sasuke without naruto's conscious thought- now that naruto knows it- he should be able to heal sasuke faster cause he's consciously thinking about it- i would think he could also use his chakra enery/cloak to act as a energy barrier to kill/clean/keep out dirt/infection/etc.

i also thought with his sage mode he could make a shelter out of earth and trees just by thought and sage chakra_kinda like an earth bender on 'avatar the last air-bender'. in sage mode he gathers energy through the earth and trees and animals and nature in general- so i thought he could also manipulate the earth and trees/vegetation to take whatever shape and form he desired.-if it's not in the canon- it would be a cool AU powr to give him.

you write some GREAT stuff- very touching-poetic-symbolic-moving:

(Sasuke wasn't sure whether he was dreaming or waking, but time for him seemed to have no meaning. Sometimes he was a child, sometimes he was as his present self. Sometimes he saw Naruto, sometimes he saw strange phantoms from his past. Naruto was twelve, or sixteen, or sometimes he looked to be the Fourth Hokage himself, but always his solid warmth and tingling chakra was firmly against Sasuke's body.

Sometimes Naruto whispered to him in this dreamy state to hold on, and he wanted to reply that he was holding on. Holding on to Naruto, and the power he could feel moving through them both. Naruto's power. It was awe-inspiring and humbling. He tried to move closer to it, to that feeling of being cherished)

GREAT STUFF

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AWESOME_ the bit with the rabbit was awesome !...the slow build up was really great and of course when it was the rabbit it was even greater. at first i thought it might be one of sasuke's ninja cats. at first i also thought the thread connecting the two meant it sensed sasuke being connected to naruto- not the rabbit being connected to sasuke...

GREAT CHAPTER

Once Tsunade got that letter, and the Allied Nations learned of how Naruto had probably swung the war in their favor, alone,

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-not true_ if sasuke hadn't rescued and then taken care of naruto and protected him- naruto never would have been able to pretty much end the war-so it was naruto and sasuke together than ended the war.- that's sasuke's free ticket back in to konoha with no punishment- that's worth a full pardon- cause his actions helped save the village.

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-in chapter 5 you wrote:

(There was only Kakashi-sensei and Iruka-sensei now, and the war wasn't over yet. No telling if they'd survive.)

-yet in chapter 6 you write:

(just found out that Kakashi-sensei was dead)

he hasn't received any news in these past chapters- so if he first says kakashi is one of the few left alive_ why now does he say kakashi is one of the ones he lost?

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-the moment shared between the 2 boys when naruto told sasuke he spoke with his father and he was the 4th hokage-that was really nice.

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sasuke realizing that naruto now has so many precious people and he's a powerful ninja liked by all_ but naruto chose to be with sasuke above all others_ that was some interesting self revelation-i just hope he realizes the thoughts and feelings he has are because he loves naruto- and in turn i hope naruto realizes how much he loves sasuke- not just as a rival/friend- but much more.

-sasuke realizing that just being in naruto's chakra cloak had healing affect on him was cool. it makes it clear why he tells naruto not to let him go, again and again- cause it's his only hope_ i don't think naruto realizes his chakra field/cloak/energy heals sasuke_ so i'm guessing he will think of this time not as healing sasuke; but finally understanding how much he loves sasuke and not the platonic kind of love.

-but naruto not realizing his chakra heals sasuke makes me wonder why you had him :

(In his grief and fear, Naruto pulled hard on all of Kyuubi's chakra, creating a sun of light)

-maybe it's subconscious or maybe it's kyuubi instinct helping him- we'll find out next chapter maybe- i just hope it brings them 2gether. and using so much chakra, i'd also like it to maybe create a special bond/link between naruto and sasuke.

i look forward to read what happens next.

you write a terribly exciting, dramatic, emotional story

and now the insufferable shit had grown a fucking brain, on top of holding him hostage? Sasuke snapped

LOVE that !

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-why doesn't sasuke tell naruto what he wants. naruto thinks sasuke wants to destroy the whole village (but that was madara)_ sasuke just wants to kill the elders that made itachi take the fall for killing his clan and for letting the clans murder go unavenged. naruto should see that as a criminal act and as treason against konoha- naruto doesn't seem to have problems killing bad people- so why doesn't sasuke ask naruto to help him kill the elders who are responsible- or if killing is out- he can put them in eternal torture with his eternal eyes and let them live the rest of their lives institutionalized vegetables being tortured in their minds every minute of every day for the next decades of life they have left- that seems a just punishment for the amount of uchias they let get killed unavenged and let/made itachi take the blame for.

-just my idea_

-but you're doing fine the way you're going- it's a GREAT story so far. starting to develop the UST this chapter is also great.

you write a great story and tell it well

You are a murderer, Sasuke. You almost killed Sakura, and nearly killed your teammate, Karin

naruto calls sasuke a murderer and the only examples he offers are NOT murders_ and then you have naruto murder all of madara's men- 5 of them i think? which was really cool by the way-awesome- though i would have liked to read how he killed nagato, deidara and kakuzu and kabuto

Doesn't matter if they mask their chakra, use Henge, clones, or Zetsu's jutsu, I'll know it's them

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doesn't madara have a instant transport jutsu through time and space or something- not much notice given for instant transport.

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i liked sasuke's dialog here- it was very AU_ but i liked it. i liked his internal thoughts too- very deep, internal struggling...the bromance thing was great! i'd never read sasuke's character say dialog like that- and it was cool and funny

how come naruto can't heal sasuke or recharge his chakra using his sage mode or earth/nature chakra or whatever else he has...or he could summon a toad healer instantly.

limp and helpless. Those two words had never been associated with him,

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i remember naruto being in the hospital, covered in bandages like a mummy, at least a few times in the anime- b4 the demon extraction came around-

you had naruto say he needed 24-30 hours to recover- then he passed out and many hours later woke up and still said he needed 24-30 hours

(They'd moved again while he'd slept, and he hadn't even felt it. What was worse, he could tell it was morning. Early morning, just after dawn.)

All I can say: Best. Story. Ever. :D And I do not mean that lightly. This story was sweet, heart-breaking, intense, funny, dramatic, and wonderful, and ah, you're so talented!

Wow. You had me almost tearing and then back to dying of laughter the next. My goodness, I think I'm in love with the Naruto and Sasuke of your story.