|Reviews for Insert Undersea Adventures Here|
| complexities 8/9/11 . chapter 1
What an interesting twist! Nemo certainly was competent, but don't underplay the effort that your SI put in to corner the Sue.
You made a handful of spelling and grammar mistakes here and there...Jess will surely mention to you that you've mistaken 'your' for 'you're' more than once.
Good story! Very thoughtful, and I like the distinction you made between "generic Sues" and "well imagined characters whose Sueish tendencies had taken over the other elements of their character".
| RedemptionWarrior 8/9/11 . chapter 1
Now, that was an interesting twist to the ending. The character of the story being self-aware of his status and medium was a nice touch. Can't really see any noticeable errors in grammar, so you did good.