What a delicious story; is there more? I've got chills, it's so interesting to read all of Theodore's rationalizations, his rage, his confusion...

You were wordy, but it works. Are her lips made of cheese or fruit? 'Ripe' is an odd word to use.

I so far am in absolute LOVE with your writing please never ever stop! I am also a huge Forsaken fan and would love nothing more than to see more stories about the trials and tribulations of Forsaken men and living women.

Ooo, murder! I love it when stories aren't afraid to kill off major characters. It's wonderful.

As always again a epic chapter from you. I'm looking forward to the next one

Definitely not written in the same happy tone of the other but still good. I'm curious to see exactly how it ends.