"Guess what." he said. (Im going to kill you while you sleep)

"What?" I asked. (don't you two just have the most stimulating conversations)

THAT WAS TOO FUNNY! And the gasping thing... I am literally laughing out loud Ztoo funny

OMG the comment about Draco shouting at Harry... That was too funny. I've read 3 of these, but yours is the funniest!

no offence but in the first chapter i wasnt very pleased : ( but anyway merry xmas and keep trying

I love your commentary, it almost makes My Immortal semi-readable lolz, and THAT is saying something. If you haven't been told already MCR stands for My Chemical Romance, a wonderful emo/alternative rock band. They are not gothic, and that they are besmirched in this story makes me sick. Like I said before, your commentary is great. About your writer's block try re-reading the books or listening to music. I find that that helps me.