Intriguing to say the least. :) I'd love to read more...

Very interesting, Lucius.

I'm a fan of yours from the Harry Potter world, so it was very interesting seeing you write about another magical world.

I love the POV of Morgan- it reads like a stream-of-consciousness, something she's thinking instead of saying.

And as always your imagery is fascinating. Love the almost child like "memory" fragments of hurt-hit-falling, etc.

It gave an unusual and interesting disorientation of Time.

And it is interesting to see you play with form- poetry more than prose. I hope this is one you are going to keep developing this one. I see it kind of like a "Wasteland" T.S. Eliot.

Keep up the good work, Lucius.

Your fan,

Regulus

Love it.