please update this soon

Can't wait for more. really! I can't wait. But so far the story's been good. Is it gonna end up being NarutoxHawkexBethany? :3 Please say yes!

Needs more sage mode

Actually a good story, keep up the good work.

Now this... this is good for the soul. So much adorable overprotectiveness.

An excellent piece of work. Please continue!

Great chapter and keep up the good work!

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon

Oh ho man Neon! Your seriously know how to do things right in these stories! I love it x3 keep up this work!

I noticed the amount of stories you've written/are writing. And then, I read "Sorry if it is short, as I am striving to update all of my stories as best as I can!".

*Deep breath*

You are very brave, good sir.

I feel like you rushed this.

For example, you have a rather odd sentence fragment: "There standing in the shadows, a"

Its a bit randomly there.

Also, this is a small error but still maybe important

"many silverlite daggers" and "silverlite armor".

Its "silverite" not "silverlite."

love it but come on! Longer please! And lemons soon please!

Awesome chapter

Hmmm I'd prefer to see a little more of the Naruto we know... What happened to the ninja?

Does a jinchuriki actually count as an abomination?

Most of all, this needs more before I can decide on the story as a whole. Interesting premise but not enough story.

Wonderful story so far, I really hope you keep working on this one

Great chapter and story so far please continue this story soon.