Great story by the looks of the first chapter. Is easy to read, and very catchy. Is awesome that you maintened the personality of Ramza from your other story (The Lion of Ivalice, which im also reading).
Im sincerely hope that you continue this story.

Hahaha, 50 Hokuten at once. I wouldn't put it past him, actually.

looking foward to teh next chapter

Well, this should be interesting. I know effectively nothing about Vagrant Story, but this still looks to be interesting.

Very well-written; your descriptions are some of the best I've read in a long time. The plotline, too, intrigues me. I'm interested to see where you'll take this.

And I know what you mean by wanting to have two characters duel. A nice fight you had there, even if only for a moment, heh.