 Tenshi Sasher 2002-08-22 . chapter 1oh...my goodness.
I am in tears. I can't explain why, but that was so sad...so heart-wrenching. The way you described Goku walking through the crowds....the warm day and the cool breeze in his hair. It gave me a feeling I seldom get an done I can never explain. It feels as if I am looking back on my life at the end of it. My life, my home, everything left behind. My memories flood over my mind and give me a wistful feeling, yet I am not scared where I am going....just reluctant to leave this place before having equal time to collect my memories and say goodbye accordingly.
That's somehwat of the feeling I got, yet I can't explain it. I am still crying, I can't blieve how good this is. It really gave me a look at how life is. Your here for a while and you feel like its forever, yet when its time to leave its been all too short. It gives you a feeling, one that cant be described as you look back over and over again....amazing how you can make ME feel the emotions unsaid in your characters, yet which were present the whole time. Honestly I have never read a fic to date that has moved me in such a deep and hard to reach place as you have.
Goku wakling through the crowd, to me it seemed as if he was in slow motion as everyone else catered to their lives, never once acknowledging the stranger who was the very reason they were alive and moving. He wasn't one of their own by birth, yet by something deeper he defended their lives....lives of people he never met and never would...at the cost of his own. Brillaint picture here.
I loved how you incorporated Vegeta into this fiction. It makes me sad, to think that almost, if not all of the Z senshi had died at this point. Chichi and Bulma would long be dead, and its sad to think that no matter how badly you want it to, life stays put for no one. To have Vegeta still alive here was great,amazing. Awesome touch.
When he wanted to go with Goku, it tore my heart in two. Here's Vegeta, able to live for longer if he so desires, yet his life has been full and he knows he has nothing more to live for or to do in this his life. Brought new unshed tears to my eyes to picture him...an old man, grey streaks with age wrinkles, yet not completely elderly in appearance, more of a sixty-something look, normally...the impact of his appearance aided greatlybto the profoundness of this story.
The dialogue at the end between the two was great. I cried even more, as it was infinitely big there. Their family and friends would be there, all they had to do was find them, and with a time expansion of forever, everyone would eventually be reunited, never to be seperated again.
The last line moved me about a smuch as anything in this amazing piece of work, brought those shimmering eyes of mine into full-fledged tears.
On the ground far below, several passersby looked up, startled, at the brief flash of golden light from the sky, blazing quickly and then gone — like a shooting star half-glimpsed from the corner of the eye, rare and wonderful and gone before it could be fully registered on the brain.
Great visual here, but my favoite line in this entire story is the directly following sentence.....
A few people started crying, and a few more started laughing, but none of them would have been able to answer, if someone had asked them why.
*wipes tear* Great, amazing, beautiful, powerful, insightful, astounding, lovely, poetic, wistful, memory-enhancing.....these words don't even scratch the surface of this amazing story. Your an amazing author, look for yourself on my favorites list.
God bless you forever for this....such a work could only have come from a direct goft of God. Much love and peace Pika's.
Love,
Tenshi |