Please finish the story

The story's very interesting, but the grammar does spoil it a bit. I know English isn't your first language (considering that, it's pretty good), but you should try and find a proof-reader.

That said, it is a good plot, and I'm interested to see what happens next.

Look I know English isn't your first language but your grammar is horrible. When you don't know how to spell something use a dictionary or google tanslate. So if you fix a few things and add some I guess this would be an ok story.

You really need to have someone beta this. It's terrible.