This is great so far! Hope you continue it soon.

You have better narrative than most, your dialouge is as bad as others though. Just because it is difficult for bat girl to speak does not mean that she is mentally retarded. Her sentences will not be verbose but there is a potential for beauty in the paradox of thier simplicity.

Think a minute to haikus.

Batgirl medically has a thing called aphonia. People with aphonia leave out words because thier speech centers don't have access to them. That does not mean that she does not think beautifully or that she is retarded.

Physically, batgirl is gracefull, which you understand and very little writers of batgirl don't --and you can make her limited speech graceful too.

Try writing as if she could speak and then start removing words and editing words to simpler one till she sounds batgirl-ish. That is how aphonia works. your story and any other of you batgirl related stories i believe will benefit from my input.

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Thank you.

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Alright another chapter! Nice addition, I thought Cass would be a good dancer, like you wrote, close to fighting. Hope there's more of the dance, not sure Cass would understand if one of the guys there made a pass at her. Thanks for story and hope you'll continue.

Great start! Please continue soon.

Oh, thank you thank you! After the last Batgirl ish I started craving some Batgirl/Spoiler fic, whether they be buddies or more. (Their relationship right now sort of reminds me of early Xena/Gabrielle.) This is sensitive and well-written and I look forward to more. -Amanda

I like this. Interesting beginning and a even more interesting pairing with Cass and Steph. You got both of their characterizations down. I liked the horror on Cass's face when Steph showed her the pink sundress. Looking forward to more from you. Have a good day, :)

This is good, I hope to see the rest soon.

Very nice start, you got the talkative Steph and the halting speech of Cass down good. I liked how you had Cass thinking of why she liked training with Steph, explains a lot about what's going on in the girls head. The shopping trip was nice, and I'm glad the pink sundress didn't last long, black leather is more Cass style. Really looking forward to more!

Great start, and I like your characterization. I can't wait to read more!