I am still following your creation here...I am glad you are posting again...this has been a very nice fic so far...I hope your next post isn't so far away.

I like the idea of the story. Just a lil advice:

-use a line or other things to separate your disclaimer/notes/non-story materials from the real story. It makes the flow clearer

-don't smash everything into one single paragraph, even if they're all related. Separate them into paragraphs to make the story easier to read

Good luck.