Wow

Hahaha very sexy :)

Maybe you should rate this M now...

Plz update soon

This is awesome! Just a tip though, the links for outfits don't work for me, sooooo yeah. Other than that, this story is amazing and I really want to know what happens next. Good job!
P.s. I want to see the movie too! Got to love Rodrick... :)

Again, I actually like this fanfic because I like the chemistry between them :)

but I have to give some helpful points:

EXPLAIN your outfits, because the links are not working.. Just look at the outfit and try to explain it.

and Maybe Jess shouldn't of forgave him so fast, that was too quick. But I guess it was your fanfic, but
continue writing :) Can't wait for Chapter 15.

I thought it was dead good! go on with ch2

that is a very good story you should right more of it

thanks for writing the story its really good

You should probably think about putting your story into paragraphs and not just a huge block of text. Also, proper formatting for dialogue is shown below:

Person A and Person B were talking,

"Words and clauses as well as sentences." said Person A

"I can say things with proper formatting." declared Person B as they proceeded to also correct grammar and spelling in order to make the world a better place.

The end

Instead of sending links to what she is wearing, actually EXPLAIn in detail!

Also, put your story into paragraphs.

Interesting story anywho :)

Instead of sending links to what she is wearing, actually EXPLAIn in detail!

Also, put your story into paragraphs.

Interesting story anywho :)

Pleaze update soon with maybe three chapters instead of one think about kk? Duces trist out

OMGEEEEEEEEEE! o Me love dis. Plz update soon.

Peace Love War Out! O3O