First off - who's Georgia Nicholson? Is she from another franchise, if you don't own her?

I don't know how seriously you're taking this story, but I like your character's voice - I mean her slang, her way of speaking and the way she interprets things. However, if you really are going to continue with this, then you need to slow things down a lot. She's spent 2 days in Krynn and you haven't touched on setting or characterization?

Anyway, interesting idea, interesting character, the level of detail just needs work.

Harold