WHEE!

I'm reviewing for da wunderful writer lady!

I LOVE Lina/Gourry fics!

... please write more!

whe!
a nice one shot!
but i hate to say it, but a little on the short side.
but 20 mins is quite impressive!

ooh that was sweet, a little srtange but sweet.

Oh this was beautiful! And thank God its L/G! There are very few R fics here on ff.net. I'm looking forward to read your other lemon fic! ;)

Bien hecho!

Super bonita tu historia (kawaii! kawaii! kawaii!...) Es super tierna y bien romántica... te has superado. Sigue así! "-" /

KAWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIII! O

Just a word: oooooooooooooooooooooooh (maybe this is not a word U)

Hala, ves? yo tb se ingles XD Simplemente es precioso, m encanta DIOX! Hacia tanto k no leia un fic asi... *_* *babea* Xk a mi no m salen asi? Ya no m gusta ni el k t escribi x Navidad! Este es tan bonito, tan romantico, tan TAN! Todavia estoy respirando raro, siempre m pasa cuando leo un fic especialmente romantico... Jo Megu k bien t ha salido... *_*

Good ficcy.I ove the detail youput into it...gross but cool..

Kawaii Megumi-chan o! I totally loved it! (but you already know that anyways XP).

kawaii...Lina and Gourry? _

Wow. This was really kawai. It's one of the first Lina/Gourry stories I've read that I liked this much. ( Does anyone else know what mouse is talking about? Shoots distasteful look to review above.)

I love the point of view that this was written in. It was very beautiful and conveyed a lot of emotion. _

Nice writing, but it seems rather independant of the exact characters involved.

That is, you can identify the couple in question, but only by a few random

comments, which don't seem very important, and not by their interaction or

anything else. You could probably replace those identifing comments by

other comments and then it would be just as much about another couple.

You're very good at description, especially relating physical and emotional feelings

of the narrator, but you should try giving it a context or plot. The reader is left

wondering how Lina finally admitted to herself that she cares about Gourry,

and why they're in the same room at night. (In the series, they usually have

seperate rooms. Have they gotten married? When is it set with relation to the

show?

Also, you might want to put a little more information into your summary. _;

Hope this helps you in future writing!

Nice writing, but it seems rather independant of the exact characters involved.

That is, you can identify the couple in question, but only by a few random

comments, which don't seem very important, and not by their interaction or

anything else. You could probably replace those identifing comments by

other comments and then it would be just as much about another couple.

You're very good at description, especially relating physical and emotional feelings

of the narrator, but you should try giving it a context or plot. The reader is left

wondering how Lina finally admitted to herself that she cares about Gourry,

and why they're in the same room at night. (In the series, they usually have

seperate rooms. Have they gotten married? When is it set with relation to the

show?

Also, you might want to put a little more information into your summary. _;

Hope this helps you in future writing!

That was cute! I LOVE THAT COUPLE! (doesn't want to give it away to the audince before they read the fic ())