Well this cleared some plot holes in the original story. To be honest. if Mafia II was able to be modded, then I would made this story into a mod, but just have to see if they choose to make a modding tool...

Its funny how you read it in Vito's voice :)

REALLY great job you've done here. Keep up the good work, or you will be 'sleeping with the fishy'.

Really something here

I like it. It's a good story, and much better than all of the Vito/Henry love stories (not that there's anything wrong with that) that seem to be cropping up.

* whines *

C'mon you little tease, you really should finish the story, complete the other chapters as well and share them. :D

It gets a bit confusing who said which sentence, I admit, but the plot seems interesting enough!

(Plus, I love the game, so I wonder how can you make Rose blend into the story line...)

Yo this is a good story, but it gets confusing when you switch from one POV to the other real quickly, just stick with one and switch in-between chapters or at least cut-off a good paragraph and have Vito's POV or Rosa's POV. I don't write any stories though, but it's just harmless advice.

AWESOME