interesting idea, but the story is very hard to read. change that and use something other than exclamation marks and it will be a whole lot better!

Hey! Sorry it's been so long. I really liked this chapter, but I thought the last one was better. Well, see you at school.

luv ya,

Jessica

(I'm missin' you this summer. Warm thoughts! Stay cool.)

this story was dumb that is all

hello,

I thought that this story was VERY VERY hard to read because of the way you use exclamation marks (!) after every sentence. Is this done on purpose or are you a child or new to the language or something?

Your formatting is unreadable. Try separating it into paragraphs, and using proper punctuation.

The story is fine, it's just the format is bad.