Ohmigod! WHAT DID HE DO? O.O

Ok, really sorry but... Its Redfern not Redfirn and dead instead of died at the end! Sooorry! Just trying to be helpful but I know it can come across as rude and mean... I had that happen to... :'(

But I can't believe half of that! :O

I kept going bug eyed I think at parts...

Pleasssssssssse update! Ohmigod he better not have kissed her or bit her! :O

You write better than me! its been a good read so far. can't wait to see what you write next.

awesome! update!

This is great, make sure you you fix the spelling mistakes at the bottom though. ;)

It's good for a first fanfic.

Ooooh, I like the beginning. Its got me intrested but I think the 'AHHHHH' bit would sound better as she screamed because... it kinda made me laugh then take it seriously. O.O

Sorry! But I like it and I would like to see where this is going soooo update! :)