|Reviews for IS Infinite Stratos: Sacred Twins|
| Fireminer 5/23/13 . chapter 14
Hey, I am the 110th reviewer, althought this story should had been far passed this. Your story is magnificent and is the source of inspiration for many people. Hope you can continue soon!
| Harouki 5/19/13 . chapter 1
Number 1: Good story with an interesting premise, hope to see more in the future.
Number 2: You need a beta reader. Desperately.
Your grammar is shoddy in a lot of areas, especially during Madoka's POVs.
Example : BLOODY HELL, as I expect, he don't read most of it!
"Don't" should be "didn't"
Example: Your own embarrassment makes tense atmosphere. I screamed mentally.
This sentence sounds extremely awkward. Perhaps something like "Your own embarrassment is only adding to the already tense atmosphere"
Number 3: So far, Madoka's presence doesn't seem to be changing ANYTHING from the novels. It's like you're copying the translations and just adding Madoka's POV in randomly. She's acting like a spectator rather than a participant half the time.
You can't be afraid to change a few things. Sticking to canon will only hurt your story in the long run. Like the Ichika not reading anything about IS's bit. With Madoka around, shouldn't she be asking him if he's been reading or making sure Ichika's read even a little bit of the book? They sound like they're close so why would Madoka overlook Ichika's studies?
The story isn't bad, per se, but it's a long way from being good.
You need to put more work into it.
| Kosuke-Dono 5/17/13 . chapter 13
I'm waiting for the next one. Thank you for uploading this one..
| Magnus Port 5/5/13 . chapter 5
Alright, I've read up to this chapter. Don't really have time for an in-depth review so apologies for it being very short.
There's still a few grammar problems from what I can see. Maybe another proofreader can help?
Tone down on using capital letters to emphasize dialogue or a sentence. Some scenes need to be described more. Your dialogue also tends to fall flat or lack proper pauses.
And your story doesn't have that strong a hook. Your premise is decent but it's missing something important. Not sure what is missing though that maybe the lack of sleep talking.
| Arakan7 4/19/13 . chapter 13
Whew Being bored at work and nothing else to do sure helped me to finish catching up on this lil series. Although 'lil' seems to be pushing it now with the lore you're creating for it. 'Emperor' eh, why did you make it such a melancholy thing now...
And I find myself agreeing but not agreeing with Ichika's POV on what he did being bad. Sure, defending the weak from bullies is right, and sometimes, using force has to be seen as right too. Even if it got out of hand with the stabbing, I, personally, wouldn't be so eaten up by it. But like I said, that's just me. Humans can be such idiots sometimes.
Ah Madoka, I JUST WANT TO HUG HER! She's so incredibly CUTE! Oh the beach chapter(s) are going be the sweetest torture. I find myself ignoring Chifuyu in favor of Madoka in this story, I guess it's because Chifuyu is already 'preoccupied' by an 'unknown' ... .
| Shadow 3/22/13 . chapter 13
YES! FINALLY AN UPDATE! XD
Nice chapter, though I agree with the others about the grammar. Maybe you should get another beta reader? I dunno, it's just a suggestion.
Anyways, nice plot line here, this story feels original, and I really like how you show the badassness of Ichika, Madoka, and Dan here. Everyone else also seems to be one hell of a fighter here.
Again, nice chapter, hope to see more updates soon ;)
| ZeroXSEED 3/22/13 . chapter 13
Another shameless author rant here, please pardon if this sincere explanation offend anyone.
On the issue of spelling, I am freaking confident it's 95% flawless, grammar is another story though. I won't blame anyone, I'm not an English speaker, and I trust my sole co-writer for grammar check. What you see is what you got and if you want to fix it, I'd be honored.
Regardless, I present you my gratitude for the honest and critical review.
| zhead 3/21/13 . chapter 13
As happy as I am that this updated...
Er, fix the grammar a bit, would you?
| animekingmike 3/21/13 . chapter 13
Holy cow. First thing first, please take the time to edit your chapters more. My eyes hurt from how bad the grammar and spelling is. Damn.
| Strigon13 3/21/13 . chapter 13
It's really good to see this one updated. Very good chapter, waiting for the other.
| lajoie21 3/21/13 . chapter 13
good chapter. what happen next?
| Link 1/5/13 . chapter 12
I really wish half the story didn't revolve around Charles... more Ichika and Madoka love!
| Guest 1/5/13 . chapter 10
My favorite character Charlotte is turned into a guy WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
| Lajoie21 10/27/12 . chapter 12
When the next chapter?
| Han-Ko 10/25/12 . chapter 12
Great fic D. Hope you can update it soon