Oh no! I don't think the police would have let Harry go that easily.

This is good! Are the police going to listen to Harry? Are they going to actually look at Harry?

Good for Harry!

Good chapter. Much too short though.

Really good start!

Neat! Touching and poignant too. Harry had such a dismal life with the Durlseys and I really hope he gets away from them for good soon. Funny how you have him accidently wind up at the Malfoys! Well written; keep up your good work!

Names Pettigrew, Peter Pettigrew.”

( A/N- “ My names Bond, James Bond.”)

*snort*

Anywho it's preety good a little too rushed really.

Okay, I don't want you to get angry at me for being to harch or critical. I just want ed to point out a few things that would help you writing techiniques. First of all, you need to gather a plot and then add to it, kind of like feeding a fire. Second, you need to be more dscriptive. Tell about what the scenery looks like and and tell more about, maybe for example, what the characters personalities were like. Ex: "I don't know." Harry replied with a sadistic grin on his face. This is going to be a long one. You need to work on your sentence structuring and grammatical skills. You need to use commas a little more often. You also tend to jump araound a bit. It seems kind of bland, like there's no excitement. Use exclamation points when you DO want to show excitement. I mean Harry is the boy-who-lived, wouldn't people be more excited to see him, in person? 'I hope that didn't ssound too harsh. I don't want you to think I'm trying to sound mean or anything.' Um, well, I think that is it for now.

Arifel

Patricia you took my advice?

I cant believe it! Is my advice good

or something? Okay keep up the good work!

I still cant believe u took my advice!

-little sakura

Um...

I'm sorry but that was rather anti-clamatic

I liked the story until the end though...

You can make Dumbledore apparate in the dungeon and rescue Harry and why is harry only in kindergarten maybe u should make it at least 10 years old Harry Potter. Dont rushed all the excitements and the events its going a lil' too fast but the rest is okay. Keep it up _

Tell me if u have the other chapter up okay?

- Little Sakura

I'll kick Dudley gang's butt if i were Harry!

well nice start! gotta read the next chapter!

LOL Why is it that when little kids run away they always go to the park? I know two kindergarden kids that did this... Even I did it

(I wasn't running away though, I just wanted to go to the park. My mom had a fit when she couldn't find me in the house)

Very nice story! _

Nice story. . .just make the chapters longer and add some more details and I think you could have a first rate story. Update soon, please, thanks

You might get more reviews if you let anonomyse reviewers review.

I liked this plot twist.

Malfoy and Harry didn't HATE each other...

That is interesting...

Anyway, i like this story.