wow, your syle of writing is so powerful, I love it, this was an amazing fic, I loved it so much, you are an amazing writer and I hope to learn from you.

Wow. I'm still trying to sort out some mixed emotions that I have about your writing style. You write long, convoluted, and at times pretentious sentences. Then again, I've been accused of occasionally doing the same thing. Sometimes it can work. Other times it just sounds sort of goofy.

That said, you really did an excellent job capturing an intimate moment between Shinjiro and Akihiko. The scene was oddly touching, and even though the smut-lover in me longed for more graphic details, the descriptions of how the two became entangled in one another's lives was perfect. Although I found the introduction to be a little clunky, the story wrapped up beautifully.

Before anything else, I seriously think you should up the rating to at least T (or M to be safe). Some people might be freaked out by the amazingly detailed displays of BL in this story. xD Just my two cents on the matter.

Otherwise, great job! It's a very tastefully written fic. I really loved the amount of detail and thought you put into the story.

I'll be looking forward to future Persona 3 stories you come up with!

There were some run ons, but otherwise very good!