ok, like both ur other stories, this was crap, but here are some hints to decent writing:

your stories are all the same! quit doing the whole "she did this and then this happened and after that..." etc etc etc.

and apparently, sera broke her arm and cracked her head open. don't you think that if someone cracked your head open, you would be frickin DEAD rather than passed out for a few hours!make your events just the tiniest bit believeable, with just a little bit of common sense, suspense and GOOD WRITING?

as i said for the american pie stuff, it sucked, i mean, what u wrote was the equivilant of "i went here, and did this, and then this, and then this" u fucking need to add suspense, or mystery, because every single thing u write is just transparetn, it SUCKs!

Wow. Freaky. Cool.