   skaterofthebooks 4/15/12 . chapter 9One: I'm lazy, so what happened in the previous chapter.
Two: the Harpies are an all girl team. So unless her grandfather is transgender. He wasn't on that team.
Three: nice chapter :) |
| LilySeverus1 2/18/12 . chapter 1 pleeease update soon i love this story! |
| skaterofthebooks 2/16/12 . chapter 8 Awww (to all of it, except the littl conversation from the guys. That gets a laugh) |
| LilySeverus1 2/16/12 . chapter 8 ahh please write more! few grammar mistakes but i love love love the story ) |
| skaterofthebooks 2/7/12 . chapter 7 You keep switching from third to first person. And it's different people sometimes. And that makes it confusing. Also, you wrote "know" as "no" at least two times. Oter than that. Really good. |
| skaterofthebooks 2/3/12 . chapter 6 Love it :)
I love Kate :) |
| computer geek 2/3/12 . chapter 6 Please write some more soon! |
| anon 2/2/12 . chapter 3 really good! buutt...i think the dialog is a bit scripted you know. Its usually not that bad and doesnt affect the story but its pretty obvious in your story. I mean the first chapter i thought your story was GREAT but i just couldnt feel for lily becuase she didnt seem real. I told my self that maybe it was because you were in a hurry so i read your next chapter and there it was again like they were reading from paper. I read the third and seriously thought you had talent so i decided to tell you and hope you dont take this in the wrong way because i care . I wish poeple told MEEE what weaknesses they found in my stories but usually i get a load of 'great chapter' with 100 exclimation marks while they're really thinking 'egh i really want to tough it up and say her romantic structure suck...but im too scared illhurt her feelings :(' I know a good writer when i see one and your one heck of a writer. If you would like to take my advice go ahead and if you dont want to again its up to you.
This is amazing i speak truly from the heart :) |
| I Turned Into A Banana 11/4/11 . chapter 5 Awesome! Write more. |
| cat.cruz93 9/24/11 . chapter 5 Oh my gosh! I love it! And sorta have an idea but i wanted to verify is Kate a werewolf? I can't wait to read more, there a couple grammer and spelling errors so just read over it before posting i guess. Good job keep writing |
| Elliette 9/24/11 . chapter 5 Oh your story is so good. I can't wait to read the rest. (: |
| I Turned Into A Banana 9/17/11 . chapter 3 Great Story |
| I Turned Into A Banana 9/17/11 . chapter 4 I love this story, keep writin... |
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