Oh My God! It reminded me so of Titanic. All I had in my mind was the picture of the mum telling her children a good night story to keep them calm in their bed while the ship is sinking. I'm glad though that Molly and Fred are off the ship and together. What happened to Sirius?

Love Andrea

Well, that was ... something new. Why are they on that ship, though? Were are the others? Why are they sinking? You left big holes in your story.

But you did wonderfully describing the events and characters. I love Fred's protectiveness. On to chapter 2.

Love Andrea

First off, your description & choice of words got me hooked from the beginning. The words you chose were beautiful. Now, sometimes people are in danger of drowning their story in descriptive words, but I thought this was just lovely! Not too much, not too little.

The story has started brilliantly. I love the romance in it, very sweet. From the beginning, you have most of the characters written spot-on, and you're doing quite well with the difficult prompt of a maritime accident. It makes sense, and I can't wait to see what you plan on doing in future chapters.

Brilliant beginning, good luck & I can't wait for more.