Excellent as usual. You explained the whole time paradox thing with Opal so well I actually understood it this time. :) I loved Holly's introspection through the time stream. I know it was so hard to write, but all that pain was worth it.

Yay! An update! Keep going, I'm getting really excited for the grand finale!

This is absolutely incredible! Are you sure you're not Eoin Colfer? Really, this is wonderful. I can't get over it. Good job!

Haha, an edit, that's why I'm confused. I had read a couple of chapters and it was a bit hard to read before, and I think it's better now.

Awesome rendition of TTP, I really like how you add in other POVs. Great chapter as well, I love how Holly has to deal with her feelings, along with worrying about the mission.

Awesome chapter. Yeah, writing all that had to be tricky. I had to giggle at the little bit about Holly being eye-to-eye with Arty's red boxers. 8P

Yeee! Update! :D

Read it, keep going! :)

Dear Rocket,

I don’t have much time or access for Internet stuff, but I make a point to check every two weeks for updates to your story and two others. You’re that good.

This story is NOT obscenely long. Until a story gets about five chapters or ten thousand words, it’s not worth my time to follow, since if an author has held out that long, then they’re probably serious and more likely to finish the thing than leave the readers hanging.

Your take on the book and Holly and Arty’s relationship is similar to mine and I’m curious as to how you going to handle each part. It’s the little touches that all add up in the end. Your style is not boring or pedantic. You seem to have a handle on Holly and the other characters, their actions, and emotional logic.

Writing something like this, taking one character’s POV and yet holding true to the book is a HUGE undertaking and I respect the amount of work it requires. (I once rewrote the scene in the Arctic Incident where Artemis pretends to shoot his Father all from Artemis’s POV. A mere twelve pages. That was a _pain_, since Colfer uses five different points of view and the actions of the characters between scenes don’t all logically follow. Your effort so far is amazing.)

My apologies for not having time to write a response for each chapter, even though you deserve one each time.

Since you asked my opinion, I’d prefer regular updates, however long between, as long as it works out for you.

And please, finish it. Not too fast. Your pacing is nice as it is. But I very much want to know how Holly is going to feel and her conclusions about her and Artemis at the end of the book.

What a chapter! I really, really liked this. It was so... I guess beautiful is the right word. And because I'm a sucker for romance (but deep down, who isn't?;), I liked the amount of it in this chapter.

I'm looking forward to see how you handle Hollys emotions when they gets back to the future, since we don't really get anything told in the books. Or atleast not enough to be sure how she feels about Artemis.

- Ant

Thanks for the update! I don't review regularly, but I figured that you deserve one. )

Honestly, your story is very well written and I'm surprised that you're not getting more reviews.

This is really, really good! Grammar, spelling, sentence structure are all great! The only chunk of criticism I have is the same thing I told SQ; Artemis's eye colour is messed up. Remember, this is after TLC, so he has one blue, and one hazel. Stupid finicky little thing, I know, but it's a pet peeve. Although, I may be wrong, what with the whole going-back-in-time thing. Keep it up(dated)!

Really great work on this chapter. I can tell you work so hard on this, and it's worth it.

Hey, I love your work and I appreciate how much time and energy I see you put into ALL of your stories, and how much you care about making it meaningful. You back up your stories with research and realism, and put your entire heart into making every action and thought believable with the characters you're using. I just wanted to say that I've noticed! And thank you for being such an inspiration as an author :)

(P.S. #100!)

Aw, girl, that was /so/ good. So so good. Funny, clever, beautiful. Exceedingly excellent. You do not analyse such glorious fanfic-ness, you simply lie back and bask in its glory.

Fab job.

Holi

PS. Apparently we're posting buddies :) Woo for Wednesday!