I appreciate a healthy dose of silliness every once in a while. The AN did get a little heavy at the end which I (like I believe someone else has said) found distracting, but if you're going to write crack, I suppose you might as well milk it for all it's worth.

Just read your story it was good.

Great story, sis!

This is an interesting concept, three key characters stuck together on a yacht.

Parts of it are a little confusing, especially the Author's Notes (ANs). In my case, I found that they distracted me from the progression of your story. I would respectfully suggest that if you feel compelled to make parenthetical comments, you might want to put them all at the bottom of the story, like endnotes.

I don't get the "Dodge Island" reference...

I am looking forward to the next part.