Ew

Anguish, tension, drama, cliffhangers, and at the end a beautiful kiss - who could ask for more? :)
Though I'm very glad I didn't read this before the last (is it the last for good? Because that would be a shame) chapter was up, if I had I think I would've gone mad with the waiting and the wondering. A lovely, so-sad story. Rock on.

AH! I cried.. actually I'm crying riht now.. you see i cant even type.. to sad to fix it..:0( *tear* to gotta do.. uh whatda ya call it a Epilogue yeah yeah thats it oh god you have to.. *sniff*

love

Ty

Just trying to get something dedicated to her

Dude, change the rating!

Ya don't use the F and H in a G FANFIC!

oh. my. god. that was soooo depressing. *sobs* i loved it, but i think you probably could have made smaller paragraghs, other then that- it was great! keep up the good work! -

This has potential, but may I suggest some minor changes?

First: move the rating up to PG-13. This involves issues that are too mature for 'G'.

Second: Edit to seperate into more paragraphs. It's too difficult to read when it's one big paragraph the whole way through.

Just some ideas! I still think it has major potential. After all, there aren't that many EEnE authors out there, ne?

good but u really REALLY need to consider moving that to at least pg-13! you dont want any little kids coming across it do u?

You have a good story here, but maybe you should move the rating up.

It was a good chapters were a little short but thats ok. I can't wait for more!