I think the original plot idea was good. But it was rushed and reads more like an outline rather than an indepth story. Reading other fanfics with the same characters may help with dialogue. Unfortunately, the 3 characters in this story sound childish.

Very short story, theirs moments too but I loved it.

No more needed words to explain everything, like often love is simple. That's what I deduced from it. And this "so, so rare" couple, I'm really glad you wrote on them :-)

Thanks!

awwwwwwwwww what a sweet ending

Cute! are you going to do a sequel?

Awwwwwwwwwww what a sweet chapter Dave holding to Aaron's hand at the end.

This is good. I look forward to more.

Short but still cute

I love it Hotch is in love with Dave. How sweet Dave came to take Hotch to lunch.

Cute! Can't wait to see what happens at Lunch!

Liking it. Had me smiling Which is good. :)

Too bad Dave couldn't tell Hotch what he just told Derek. I liked the end when Dave told Derek " Derek, you say one word and I'll shoot you where the Unsub shot me."

This is great! I can't wait for more.

I figured it was husband #1. Hopefully Hotch will feel the same about Rossi.

lol ooo

:P

I'm looking forward to Rossi's answer to Derek's question.