I just wanted to let you know that it would be impossible for Marcus Flint to be there because he already graduated some years earlier. Over all a great story though! Great job! :)

This was a great way to use your quote! Really, the way you threw both the quote and Markus in there was brilliant. I loved it.

Even though it was short, your style of writing still managed to get so much conveyed. I could *feel* how flustered and nervous Hermione was, how stressed and worried it was making Ron, how even Harry, who doesn't usually pay the most attention, was starting to notice things were wrong. And the romance was quite clear to see, at least for me.

As for grammar and spelling and what not, I only noticed one small slip-up. In the sentence where you mention Markus, which I thought was a nice way to include him into this story, you put this in your sentence. I believe it's the final sentence in the sixth paragraph.

" and point to tall witch."

It's missing the word 'the'. Other than that, I couldn't see a thing wrong here.

It was a great story and I'm so glad that you took part in my challenge!