Marysue hunter, first while you are free to say what you like it is rude to call out someone on the first fricken chapter. Secondly, some people enjoy self-inserts. Thirdly while it could use some revision it has a summary that said "don't like, don't read" so frankly, you are the attention whore. Also any attacks on my state of mind will result in a report for Internet harassment.

Get your fucking self-insert out of here you attention whore.