Wow! Rosie-chan likey. Though, I cannot see Deidaras soul trapped like a puppet. He's free like a bird. Keep up the good work!

that was wonderfully rhymey, as well as pretty darn good! great job!

Oh...my...God...

This was amazing. Absolutley phenominal. The rhyming added to the mystery, and sadness to the poem, and I congradulate you.

This is my favorite couple, and the way you didn't use their names, but their hair colors made this even better. I'm also glad that you didn't describe them by their eyes. That idea has been used so many times, and the hair color idea was a refreshing change.

Again, I say wow. My favorite line was:

"Life like cards, he'd fold" I loved that, andit's so true.

Good job, and I hope you keep this up. I loved it!

:D