Awww, that was so cute! I love how you wrote it as the 25 years after his death, sort ofin the after life and he peered back at the people - Sirius, in particular - was really well done.

i like what you wrote, but it really hurt my eyes to read it because it's all bunched up in the one.

Yet i really did like it.

I'm keepign teh scores so you'll get the results soon, maybe next week :D

keep writing; it was really well done!

vicky xx

Just one big paragraph that is hard on the eyes. Break it up, please