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pinksnowboots 3/5/12 . chapter 1Mah! That was my sound of surprise. That was very good writing, and then he died. Did not expect it to end that way... Although I prefer RoyEd, I appreciate the writing in this-little anecdotes around the theme of fire. I don't think you needed to repeat "Fire has many uses." Since you usually started each new segment with "I've seen it used," the repetition becomes redundant and a little distracting, but that's just a personal stylistic preference. Overall, I'm impressed. It made me nostalgic for FMA. I would definitely encourage you to keep writing! |