I don't think Alice spoke in that way, with the 'thee' and 'thou', but I truly did enjoy it. The ellipses could be fixed. I think you did a great job!

Really appreciated this poem, very sweet and nicely written! I'm a big Uncas/Alice fan, so thank you for this! Will you consider to write more on them?

Yes, sweet music indeed. Thank you for this lovely, thoughtful prose. I'd like to read more if you continue writing.

Judy

Hi,

VERY nicely done- I have written a bit of poetry over the years, and it is not easy- so I appreciate the effort to "get it right"! please keep writing!

joan