Hello again, glad to see a new chapter. I like Kire your doing a good job with him so far. He's not stealing lines and I like the way he is involved with Rin and Kaede. Good job, see you next chapter

An oc eh? I would like to meet this person. Is this the man hidden in Rin's shadow, I had thought that was refering to Itsuki. In any case I hope you update soon.

Very nice start. The bulding of suspense, and mystery. You really captured Itsuki well. See you next chapter

a most wonderful story. it's a little vague in the beginnin about what it all relates to with Shuffle, but as this is the introduction, you shouldn't sell the coat before you got it. keep going.