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  Annie Anon 4/25/12 . chapter 1 Hey, I don't want to offend you but i feel your story was rushed and tbh I had no idea what it was on about... But it was a good first attempt... I think next time try to have more detail, feelings and just take your time to really entrance people with your story/chapter/scene. I would also try to avoid using text language in your writing... after all your not a phone ;) :P Well better luck next time, I'm sure you'll do better :) |
 x-ema-x 3/24/12 . chapter 4Remember: • spelling • punctuation • grammar • don't use text speak But apart from that, cool story! |
| Mrs. Frank Hardy 11/9/11 . chapter 4 smiles. |
| TheQueenOfPickles 11/8/11 . chapter 4 Umm...i think ur talking in txet again... Lol well, for u making me wait so long for a small chapter, i will get u bak at skool. Watch ur back lol. |
| TheQueenOfPickles 11/2/11 . chapter 3 Omg! I wrote this chapter! Lol had to point it out, considering it is my character :) welllllll... Im good... |
| Mrs. Frank Hardy 10/31/11 . chapter 3 I like the informal thought bubbles. :) You did a really wonderful job on this chapter. I hope you'll countinue! Mrs. Frank Hardy |
| Mrs. Frank Hardy 10/18/11 . chapter 2 durn! i hate cliffhangers! tell me when ch. 3 is up? |
| Mrs. Frank Hardy 10/10/11 . chapter 1 The randomness of your story makes it my kind of story. I love that you include Laurel in this! More! ;0 Mrs. Frank Hardy |
| TheQueenOfPickles 10/9/11 . chapter 1 YAY! I GET TO BE YOUR FIRST REVIEW. Ok, now that thats settled, I need you to quickly type up the next chapter or you are doomed. Okay? Cause guess what? I know where you live... |
