|Reviews for First Contact|
| Oddments and Tweaks 11/5/11 . chapter 4
I really liked this one, you kept the pace but this was much easier to follow! Talk about drama though, they don't get a minute's peace do they? Nice inclusion with Neuros-very creepy way she's found to move too! Urgh! I wonder what happened to poor Crystal though? I liked the additional tech you've created on Futuregate, explains a lot of Caleb's movements ship to ship! Nice way to leave it on a cliffhanger as well even if it was a little rushed! Looking forward to the next one!:)
| Oddments and Tweaks 10/22/11 . chapter 3
Wow. Just read these 3 chapters in one go. It's certainly a different take on the story! You've got a really frenetic pace going on here, it works for the story I think but I was begining to get a little lost in places-there was so much happening in the space of a few sentences-maybe put a few little pauses in here and there, just to break it up a tad and let the reader absorb what's going on. Really enjoying it though, looking forward to the next chapter-poor Crystal btw!