|Reviews for The Controlled Chaos of Free Will|
| Wrin 5/5/12 . chapter 5
I liked the original story, but this is actually better in some ways. My only concern is that there will need to be a major time skip somewhere to finish up this story and move on to the next person's "question", otherwise you're basically just MST3K'ing it.
| mountainelements 5/5/12 . chapter 5
Whoa. This chapter is another amazing example of why you chose One Small Step. The sensei are all getting a better idea of how they should be teaching. Hinata has a new philosophy to evaluate herself with. The watchers is learning loads of small things that might be useful. It's too early yet to see how everyone will be affected by the stories, but I can already tell that it should be a huge benefit for Naruto and Hinata. Thanks for the update!
| Preier 5/5/12 . chapter 5
the chapter felt right. (both the original and your commentary)
naruto coming back for more of the abuse dished by sakura always
struck me as one of the more unhealthy aspect of the canon. i get
the attempt at slapstick humor, but damn...
seeing a more mentally balanced naruto reject this kind of treatment...
yeah, it felt right.
thank you for sharing your stories.
| Koroby 5/4/12 . chapter 5
| Fionn the Otaku 5/4/12 . chapter 5
Glad see your back with another chapter of this fic and even happier to hear you've been thinking about a sequel to Shifting Connections.
| Pandecio 5/4/12 . chapter 5
Once again, a heavy dose of fluff that is almost enough to send me into a diabetic coma, in other words, you did great in portraying the original's overall tone.
What do you plan to do in the future chapters, are you going to have crack-fics, humor, or only fluff or action?
If you are accepting suggestions, you could try A Freak, A Creep & A Psychopath from legendary legacy, that fic could probably cause hearth attacks all around
| chm01 4/12/12 . chapter 4
| Dymian 4/9/12 . chapter 4
*smiles* This is good stuff. Well balanced. Just the right amount of sugar and snark.
| Preier 4/1/12 . chapter 4
very nice reactions from konoha'a finest,
i particularly liked the idea of gai&naruto
flaming (youthfully) the hyuuga complex
thank you for sharing this story on a story with us.
| JediClaire 3/13/12 . chapter 1
I know this is a bit somber for this story, but maybe for Gaar's question, or any of the sandsiblings you could use this story?
Retribution by ncfan
I don't know wheither this goes against canon or not, but one of the reviews of this story, about Gaara'a mother and siblings loving him really got my attention and made me think of you.
| another review 2/29/12 . chapter 4
i agre whit the former reviewer a dark story would be a nice contrast but i think that for Kurenai the story team 8 would be more fitting i mean she might be thinking after one small step that it would be better if she had had naruto on here team.
Else great story so far and i can't wait for the next chapter
| Mujun 2/27/12 . chapter 4
I love the story so far and I think it has a lot of potential. I'm interested in seeing how the relationship between naruto and hinata work out now that they are seeing all this from an outside perspective and really can't wait to see what naruto does to the hyuga. If I might suggest a dark naruto story (even a short one) after this one to give a little contrast to as anko puts it the "sweetness."
| Author00 2/9/12 . chapter 4
Can't remember if I reviewed this story already, but I just want to say, great job. I've never seen an immortal be such a... well... bastard. Anoth Vortex is a right bastard. On the other hand, anothvortex is an excellent writer.
| NARUHINA FTW 1/28/12 . chapter 4
HA KURENAI EAT MY SHORTS!
really gode chapter you captured Kurenai's logical nature very nicely, but this Kurenai apperently dosen't know Naruto :)
| Erdrick17 1/19/12 . chapter 4
Normally I would give a more complete review however there is only one thing I can say and that is MORE PLEASE!