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Saki-Hime 5/23/12 . chapter 13
Aww poor Akana, glad Ranma realized he was being a jerk and apologized. Very nice, update soon.
ZoeTsunami 5/23/12 . chapter 13
AAAAAH, this is so beautiful! :D

You did it again - you managed to capture me with your AU and wonderful story. There were a couple of typing mistakes in this one, and also at one time I felt the tense you used wasn't quite right, but it didn't affect my understanding of the story - and frankly I was far too interested in what you wrote to care that much about grammar or spelling

Another awesome job. 'nuff said. :3

ZoeTsunami
Richard Ryley 5/23/12 . chapter 13
This chapter was really emotional, and wonderfully subtle. I caught on that this was an AU right away, from the flashback to Ranma and Akane's childhood that showed they grew up together. And of course, Akane's "I see you" was great foreshadowing. Still, I didn't catch that Akane was blind until very near the end.

The line about the light going out in Akane's eyes I took as just meaning her change in mood due to Ranma's criticism. So it wasn't until got to the part about Ranma blaming himself that the pieces started to fall into place. As intended, I'm sure. :D The author's note confirmed it, but then going back to read over it again I caught all the other little subtle references.

I do suspect you meant to say "carelessness" and not "nonchalance". And of course, now that you've brought it up, I'm so curious about this AU. :D Is Ranma cursed? How has her blindness effected the storyline, and the threat of Shampoo and Ukyo? But, darn it, this works great as a one shot, and we'll probably never get those answers. :D
XiaraRain 5/7/12 . chapter 1
Ok, so I just finished reading all of these one-shots. It's finals week here at school, so I didn't have time to review each one individually.

But I loved them! They are so cute, sweet, and creative. I especially like the ones where Akane and Ranma are not hiding that they are in love, when they kissed, when Akane told him she's pregnant, and the last one where Ranma saw Akane in her wedding dress. Oh, and I do watch "Say Yes To The Dress" sometimes, and that's what I was thinking of while I was reading it!

Great job! I love your stories so much!
ZoeTsunami 4/28/12 . chapter 12
Awww this is soo awesome *-*

I love the emotion in this one, it was really fun to read :D

Good job!
James Birdsong 4/27/12 . chapter 12
Good two stories
Saki-Hime 4/26/12 . chapter 12
Nice, liked it, update soon.
Saki-Hime 4/26/12 . chapter 11
Aww Ranma is so awesome. Bet he wasn't expecting to be told he was gonna be a father. Liked it a lot.
ZoeTsunami 4/25/12 . chapter 11
D'awwwwwww

this is so cute :D

You know, I'm really impressed with the amount of different stories you came up with so far for this couple - there's like... tons of them here, right? That's so awesome, I couldn't have thought up more than two or three :D

Anyway, keep them coming! I love your ideas :D

ZoeTsunami
serenityselena 4/25/12 . chapter 11
a very nice chapter...

oh my... what news for Ranma _
Mii-ChanChan 4/25/12 . chapter 11
Awww, so cute! I had no idea that they were already married until the last few sentences, good job in keeping that hidden D
Saki-Hime 4/22/12 . chapter 10
Aww he's so cute. I want more, update soon plz.
Saki-Hime 4/22/12 . chapter 9
Awww great chapter, so cute.

What do you mean Zombie week at university?
Saki-Hime 4/22/12 . chapter 8
Very funny.
ZoeTsunami 4/19/12 . chapter 10
Awww, that was so cute :D

I love the detailed description in this story

I also enjoyed the 9th story btw - I just didn't get around to writing a review *lazy me* xD

Keep up the good work, your ideas are awesome!
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