LOL! That was pretty fun to read! :) But first... What writers hate most: CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM. XD
- Actually, Ember's surname is McLain and not McClain (explains the McLame nickname), which means that you misspelt it multiple times during this story... :(
- Majority of the story is grammatically correct, but I noticed that sometimes you omit punctuation marks at the end of dialogues.
- The part where the characters from the two cartoons met was a little awkward... Or was it just me? Well, at least this doesn't contain DannyxDawn love-at-first-sight moments. -_-
I couldn't find anything else wrong with the story except for these minor errors, so great job! :D needs more Pokemon/DP crossovers! INSTANT. FAVOURITE. XD

LOL that was fun!,

That was great! I really wish they made more DP/Pokemon crossovers like this one. If this wasn't a one-shot, I'd be demanding updates!

INSTANT FOLLOW! I LIKE IT!