|Reviews for Lucario and the Mysterious Magician of Paris|
| sirimiri 6/2/13 . chapter 1
There are only two things I can think of for improvement. First, the grammar. For example, "he feel," when I believe you meant "he felt," or "he feels." Secondly, while I do enjoy considerably long sex scenes, I don't like them when they're too long and drawn out. (But this is simply my personal opinion.)
Also, to surprise the reader when Facilier shows Gackt the newspaper, I would've kept the scene where Facilier transforms into Gackt out. So then I believe it's a considerable sharp turn in events, because he is trapped. But I don't think that changes much.
Onto the things I would like to compliment specifically, I enjoyed the long, detailed description when Lucinda is introduced, from where Facilier had met him to why he was in the basement in the first place. I also really liked the changing of Gackt's name in the text to his new name shortly after he's given it. I think it adds on to how he gives completely.
I quite enjoyed it. I will probably be re-reading it again soon.
| Rilu starlight 5/30/13 . chapter 1
ALL OFF MY YES
| Gage 3/30/13 . chapter 1
It was well written, but its lacked alot of detail in terms of the environment. It could have used more descriptive languge in that way! Also, i dont really see how gackt could have just Fallin in love like that, again during the BDSM scene, and i was sort of hoping that he was trying to trick falicier into trusting him, so he could escape or kill him. But over all it was a wondeful story! Great job with the description of the sex scenes, and the description of the characters was perfect!
| A.K.M Fahim Shahriar Khan 1/2/13 . chapter 1
Great Job ! Even I am straight, I still enjoy reading Yaoi ! And, a surprise ! I have a perfectly matching pic for this story ! Here: .
| Guest 12/29/12 . chapter 1
| radom person 12/12/12 . chapter 1
make it a movie
| Amaterasu Masami 12/8/12 . chapter 1
So awesomely great!
| skeilerknight 12/4/12 . chapter 1
liked and loved it.
was still alittle question of how time didnt pass of utsukushi accepting his new lifstyle
but still it was great.
| hugomiguel.santos.71 11/14/12 . chapter 1
Man this story alone is a f%#ing chronicle coulnd't stop reading from 21:25 till 22:00 i mean almost an hour and reading it on my DSi is no picnic but keep up the good work *thumbs up* -
| Zoroarkcuddlesx3 11/12/12 . chapter 1
This story is pretty good, im new here so dont take my criticism the wrong way, I cummed at least twice while reading this lol. Im also looking for a partnership so plz right me back if you wanna be partners...
| VanHorn 10/30/12 . chapter 1
I constantly complement you on your work, but this one was just simply amazing. I love your work! :DDD I go to sleep reading your stories in hopes that I'll dream them as I saw them in my mind. Beautiful story, lovely details, astonishing plot, and it kept me reading for about a good hour! :DD I cannot wait till' tomorrow night! It's 12:53 am right now and I have to get ready for school at 6 / can't... stop... now... No internet connections at school! DD: Thank you so much for this outstanding piece! It was absolutely wonderful! -
| A Yaoi Reader 10/18/12 . chapter 1
The story was okay, but the grammar is lacking. I can understand if you're not English, though, and if you weren't it was a fantastic yiff. The story was lacking, but most people don't come here for those.
| Guest 10/9/12 . chapter 1
That was really good
| Guest 10/5/12 . chapter 1
great but couldnt you have left out the embarrasing parts?
| Guest 9/15/12 . chapter 1
At first it seemed like a good story because, 1: it had pretty much the best villain ever, I despise everything that he's done which is good for a villain. 2: original character names. 3: it actually had a story line and plot which is different from other lemons. 4: it has a lesson (just because you have been a fan of him/her you shouldn't say you'll do ANYTHING for them), but when I got close to the end of the story I noticed there was no happy ending (THE VILLIAN WINS!?) i got so mad I cursed like the angry video game nerd from youtube. My overall review: this story sucks BALLS just because it doesn't have a happy ending. But if there was a happy ending it would be the best story I've ever read.