| Reviews for A New Path: Volume 1 Commencement |
|---|
Multicrossover 2/18/13 . chapter 10 A good story ruined by mortal Kombat crossover. |
Guest 11/12/12 . chapter 22 How does this not have an M rating? |
dmobking 9/28/12 . chapter 23i liked alicia but oh well. |
KonFan78 9/13/12 . chapter 1 I've been a long time Superman fan for years and really liked the show Smallville. I love the way you made the transition to Sunnydale so smooth and organic to the Kent family. I also appreciate that instead of just having Clark becoming engulfed by everything going on in the Buffyverse you kept Chloe, Lois, Alicia and the rest effectively merging the universes. At first I was not sold on bringing in Mortal Kombat, but man I am glad you did. I love the way you used the MK characters and the bonding opportunity it turned out to be for Clark and Faith. It's also great to see how much Clark grew in that year in Sunnydale. Sometimes it felt like Clark was evolving at the pace of a snail in Smallville. There were some basic typos but the premise and characters were done wonderfully. Great job Chunk and I can't wait to start volume 2. |
rose lily potter 9/3/12 . chapter 35cant wait to read the next story |
Genericrandom 8/18/12 . chapter 29This is just such an enjoyable and entertaining story. There's flaws, but they're hard to focus on for me because I just enjoy reading this one so much. Normally I'm a big fan of Xander/Faith, but even I'm aware that without major life-altering forces they're an unstable match at best. Not that they can't be written together well based just on a change of timing but overall... well, stormy seas is only the beginning as it were. Smallville Clark and Faith however, seems a much more balanced beginning. Because while they both have problems most of those issues run in different directions starting from different places and ending differently. Clark's quiet and somewhat repressed maturity and good manners/morals and Faith's determination to take life by whatever part of it she can get a grip on seem like they'd meet in very interesting and, provided they have a good support structure like they do in this story, complementary ways. And they're both stubborn about what they want. You've got a good fic here, and I like it. Great job and thanks for posting it. Until next time. |
midnight15 8/4/12 . chapter 34 i love your story! can't wait for volume two, seriously this story leaves me very intrigued |
Kairan1979 7/4/12 . chapter 34Thanks for the update! I liked the showdown between Giles and Genevieve. |
cdog21 7/4/12 . chapter 34Nice cliffhanger ending. Looking forward to the sequel. |
Marcus S. Lazarus 7/1/12 . chapter 34The writing style is a bit basic at times, but the central plot is still interesting, beginning with the plausible circumstances that forced the Kents to relocate to Sunnydale and progressing from there. I would have maybe specified how Clark established the lack of souls that most vampires possess and how he learned about Angel- something he read in the right book after determining that they were present, or what?-, but confirming that they’re just remorseless demons who are already dead would probably ease most of his qualms about taking such brutal action against them, and other minor details such as the connection between the band candy and the Nicodemeus flower generally works (I would have maybe specified a slight bit of spell use as well, given that the candy just made the adults relatively carefree where a couple of people exposed to the flower actually turned violent, but who’s to say what Ethan really did with it). The appearance of Raiden was a bit of a question-mark- the ‘prophecy’ angle seems a bit off to me, although my virtually-nonexistent knowledge of ‘Mortal Kombat’ beyond the name may be responsible for that-, but the circumstances of the Scoobies and the Kents learning each others’ secrets certainly worked, to say nothing of the twist of Isobel possessing Willow and the Slayers as part of her long-term schemes (Although I would have had Isobel show some frustration at the idea of ‘needing’ Brianna to do something; she always struck me as the kind who wanted to do it all herself and probably just brought Brianna and Madeline back so that she’d give her enemies additional targets). Still, Faith’s growing bond with Clark generally works well as the two outsiders encourage each other to bond with the Scoobies, as well as Clark providing a new perspective on such events as Mrs Post’s attempts to ‘recruit’ Faith, and their bonding moments during the Mortal Kombat tournament were still effective- to say nothing of Clark’s final clash with the Emperor- even if I had virtually no idea who the other combatants actually were. The new take on the Wishverse was particularly effective, creating a highly dramatic enemy for Clark to fight as well as giving him something to think about later on, and Clark’s own lack of power during the Cruciamentum was both a neat way to avoid making things too easy for Buffy and motivated by a plausible concern on Giles’s part as he ensures that Clark won’t be discovered. Alicia’s transformation was a bit of a surprise, but it should be interesting to see the consequences of her last fight with Faith, and the final confrontation with the Mayor was certainly a neat way to include Clark in the fight without allowing him to dominate it (Although I would have maybe specified that the mystical effects of the eclipse drained Clark’s ‘solar batteries’ more than they would have been under normal circumstances). A bit uncertain about the Clark/Faith relationship, but since that’s just personal preference more than actual dislike- I prefer Clark/Lois, but those two DO make an interesting couple, with Faith’s easy acceptance of Clark going well with Clark’s ability to help her see that she can be a unique and effective Slayer on her own-, I’m willing to see how things go in the sequel when you get around to writing it (I am DEFINITELY looking forward to seeing how they react to Brainiac). Keep up the good work! |
Jeremy Shane 7/1/12 . chapter 34Good Story |
Quathis 6/28/12 . chapter 34Great ending, especially with the promise of more to come. I wonder if the Slayers with their magic weapons can take the Kryptonians on the way. Certainly has got me excited. Especially since Clark will have little way to find out about it at the Fortress. Until next time! |
SeanHicks4 6/28/12 . chapter 34Interesting end, I'm guessing that was the group Brainiac came with, since Im unfamiliar with this part of 'Smallville'. Speaking of Brainiac, now I'm kinda wondering if Brainiac and Spike will have a case of mistaken Identities since they had the same actor |
Eagles11 6/28/12 . chapter 34A great way to end a story, I like it. I have a feeling that we've not seen the last of Genevieve Teague. Since you'll be starting Vol. 2 can you have Clark NOT lose his powers that would be a weak plot point for the story, if you have Oz leave maybe Clark can fix Willow up with Impulse if he meets the League. If Brainiac and Adam are going to be the main villans for Vol. 2 Clark and Buffy are going to have their work cut out for them. Once again this was a very brillantly told story and I'm looking forward to Vol. 2. |
ben10987654321 6/28/12 . chapter 34Loved the whole story. The Clark/Faith romance was pretty much unique amongst stories i've ever seen. Of course end it on a cliffhanger. I look forward to you continuing this. |