Your really great at this, and I love the story so far. Keep up the good work.

You MUST update soon! I really like this story! u

Very, very good work here!

One of the *best* descriptions I've seen for a short story like this! I really hope you decide to continue this soon!

-Orwell

And Rose finds out her brother's been arrested. She's already devastated as it is... I wonder how she'll react when she finds out that he doesn't remember anything about her or their past life. She already seems broken up about killing their dad...

Yup, it's only going to get worse from there.

Oh my, Roselia survives and accidentally kills her dad. Though in this case, it can actually be considered self-defense considering that the man tried to kill her and all.

Anyways, I can't believe I haven't read this story yet. I love how you characterized Rose and I can't wait to see how you intend to take this story further.

Hey! Yaku here, just to tell you I'm pretty impressed with your story. I like how things are described and how everything is explained. But what I liked the most is the trama, it is will be really interesting how this story goes on... I hope you continue the story as how it's going now... Keep on! _

I find this really interesting and would love to see how it plays out! :)

This actually stands well enough as a good AU of it's own! It's my opinion, but I think it would be better in a first-person point of view. But that's just me.

One little mistake though:"Dad, please, please," Rosalia whispered with frightened vervor.

"vervor" should be "fervor".

I'd be happy to be a beta if you want!

Good luck regardless!

Signed,

Grace

Oh my god! I LOVE THIS! Please update it soon! Super soon!