Really cute and amzing story.

As I really like this. It was a great read. I think you did a wonderful job. I liked how you ended it, it fit very nicely.

Ok, I love the idea you have, but it feels like Molly just tags along for the ride and she's a little on the bland side, also the scene changes were a little confuseing. But Otherwise a good story, all I'd suggest is maybe do a little revising and maybe get a beta to ride through it. Keep up the good work!