it is a good story ( i don't know match about this story) but i like the idea

keep writing and a marry cristmas

from femke

Great story, please continue writing! I know all the people of Zeal have a pale skin and such eyes... I think it's something genetic. But I tell you again it's a very good story!

Nicely written. Very nice. Of course, all the people of Zeal have pale skin and eyes like that, its natural with magic, but still.

Very good story. _

*Sniff!* Poor Magus! -being brought back to life, I mean, not being killed.

Um . . . I think your premise is a bit off, considering that just about everyone in Zeal has at least the same color hair as him . . . I think it's a genetic thing . . . but it's still an interesting look at a neat character.