|Reviews for Darwin's Fist|
| Sunzi 5/24/13 . chapter 5
On the story: It's OK really, the SPARTANS are kind of stealing the show (though the original cast adds some nice in character humor.) I like the other references thrown in as well.
only complaint: too much 'Murica.
On that airship (USS dreadnought): It seems to be running on a British naming convention, rather than being a yank ship. Most US ships are named after: famous people, famous events, places, and older ships. (the last 4 BBs were of the Iowa class, preceded by the North Carolina class.) Your airspeed seems a little ridiculous too. the P-51D had a rated top speed of some 440 MPH (to your 520 MPH) with the Merlin engine, and it was a WW2 plane. Also your cloaking, It seems more like an active camouflage, to make the ship seem less noticeable, rather than true optical stealth.
were you reading too much Agents of SHIELD?
sorry if I seem too critical.
| Sofa king lazy 4/14/13 . chapter 9
Wow this is actually really good :). You are a good writer when it comes to action stuff. Keep up the awesome writing, bro.
| Anon 3/27/13 . chapter 1
Very interesting story. I'm not sure I caught all the references, though there are a lot of series I love woven into this chapter. The action scenes are very nice.
I must agree with another reviewer on the matter of accuracy, though - America in the canon was an upstart nation, Darwinist in the south and Clanker in the north. Seeing as the North won in the Civil War, she is more likely to be Clanker than Darwinist. Compared to Britain, home of Charles Darwin himself and the pioneering nation of genetic engineering, American fabrications shouldn't even come close to the level depicted in this fic.
In actual history as well, America during WWI was not the military might portrayed here - at best she was a latecomer in the war, who tried to delay her entry to gain the most from either side. Teddy Roosevelt had opted for a strong military, true, but you seem to forget that America is not considered a superpower at this time - that title belonged to the British Empire up to and including WWII. All the trash talk of the sergeants on British military incompetence is hardly warranted - if anything, Brits should be trash talking American incompetence. American dominance and global power was spurred on by WWII and the Cold War - before these conflicts, there had been little cause for her to devote much of her GDP into arms development. In fact, the USAF didn't even exist prior 1947.
As an Airborn fan myself, I appreciate the mention of Kate, though I should also point out that the Dominion of Canada at that time was part of the British Empire. In fact, during the war, Canadian soldiers were considered the elite forces in the field - a reputation that would continue into WWII. If Kate fabricated cloud cats and aerozoans, it would have been for the British Air Service, not for the Americans, seeing as Canada had no air force either (virtually no country in the world back then had an air force, with the RAF being one of the very first to be formed).
It's easy when writing to be overcome by patriotic bravado and depict America as greater than she was - I understand. But as a reader who pays attention to historical and canonical detail, that tends to turn me away from a story.
| Guest 3/26/13 . chapter 1
Hmmm...this gets less Dalek and more 'Murica the more I read.
| Guest 3/9/13 . chapter 7
I need more
| ReadySetJett 1/11/13 . chapter 7
Izzy makes up for her tits in SASS, GODDAMN. I EXPECTED A FULL OUT BITCHFIGHT.
But this was so badass oh my goodness.
And Marasco and Shaw are actually adorable as a couple in a scary-I-will-fuck-you-up-if-you-touch-my-bitch sort of way.
| grey280 1/10/13 . chapter 7
I'm just really entertained by "It's eating my nose!"
Poor Deryn, though - that would be a pretty creepy thing to see.
| Barking Lizards 11/5/12 . chapter 6
Well look who finally posted the next chapter! How long has it been? since June-ish?
Anyways it was good :D
| mr.tesla 8/30/12 . chapter 5
Click and bov, hahaha 10
| Guest 8/8/12 . chapter 5
In answer to your A/N, no, very few people who read this know much about weaponry. All I know is what I've learned from History class (i.e., the origins of tanks, submarines and fighter planes and the crapiness of the Ross Rifle) and whatever I felt like researching on my own (the MP-40 and old fashioned flintlocks).
Anywho, when does this take place again? 1920-something? The Dreadnaught sounds like it's packing some advanced technology... I'm not sure why but the Star Wars theme was playing in my head...
| Anchorgurl1 8/8/12 . chapter 5
*fangirls and all that* hey look I finally got around to reviewing this...
you already know I'm a fangirl for this so not much to say except can't wait until chapter 6!
| hamaiasa 8/8/12 . chapter 5
Wow, this was a great chapter! A slight typo - RESEMBLING* it was in caps :) and LOOOOOL the control-stick joke :') I was actually laughing at that, hahahah! Can't wait for the next chapter :)
| grey280 8/7/12 . chapter 5
Okay, I INTENSELY want a Dreadnaught.
| grey280 8/7/12 . chapter 4
Alright, I seriously enjoy the phrase ". . . their most recent meals weren't violently displayed for all to see"
Also, good way to destroy the Tower. Well done, that man.
| ChickWithThePurpleGuitar 6/21/12 . chapter 1
I admit I just got around to actually reading this... And it's a lot better than I thought it would be. Is Sophie based on your girlfriend, even though Marasco ends up with Shaw? Anyway, twas good. I'll read the rest now. Adios Straif-la.