YOU MUST CONTINUE WRITING THIS! IT'S REALLY GOOD! DON'T STOP NOW!

Great story so far, love the detail and plot thread.
Not too sure about the Marshall/Dash pairing there...
Shouldn't Dash be hitting on Syndi?
Hope to see you post some more!

Aw, this is fantastic! You got the voices of each character just right...I could totally hear Mars and Simon and Dash when I read it! This is so promising (and I looooooove the blossoming attraction between Mars and Dash, so cute 3) and I hope you add to it soon! I particularly love your eye for detail (like with Lost Things and How They Might Be Found Again by Herman G. Lodgepool IV - hilarious!), and the way you add to the Eerie mythos (with Simon's interest in magic because of wizened Ms. Clearwater). Can't wait to see where you go with this!