You have to add more to this. I need to have a back story and something after this, Please!

You did such a great job with writing this! I felt myself almost suffocating with Dean, yikes! Great writing, seriously. )

Descriptive feel of being trapped . . . and yikes, the rats. *shivers*

Boy! It sounds like Sammy was just in the nick of time this time.

Good description, like being buried alive. The rats were a nice addition, too. Eeek! I love it when Sam comes to rescue his brother. -

Great start...I would love to read more

I started hyperventilating halfway through the story without realizing it. So I'd say you get an A on making your writing affect the reader.

This made me short of breath and claustrophobic - poor Dean! Good story.