 FranceGamble 8/14/02 . chapter 2I found this on search. Great for being just a school assignment. I like it, but it was a bit embarrasing. I wouldn't want to post it! _ But like you say, do what teachers say! Anyway, don't quit writing. |
 Opaque 5/1/02 . chapter 2 I LOVED IT! But next time, don't make the ending come so fast. I mean, I know you were in 8th grade, but, "Cye had just had the flu, but got over it.". You should of had them, like, go to the doctor and worried as heck and THEN find out.
Also, next time, have Ryo have a little bit of a bigger part. He talked and formed the Inferno. That's about it. Other than that, I loved it so much.
C YA Robin Girl!
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